Magical Sailor Fuku

This started as a caption attempt and got outta hand, let me know if you like though. sorry if its a little un-formatted in any way.

Alan and his sister Ellie went to the beach together allot with their best freind Kairn. Kairn was really Ellie’s freind more than Alan’s, but Alan always really liked Kairn and couldn’t ever place why, having to settle for feeling somewhat left out or overshadowed by his sister who really like Kairn and wanted him for a boyfreind, despite Kairn being to old for her. One day after all three were hanging out on the beach Alan stayed behind and wandered far down the beach after Kairn and his sister went home, Alan didn’t feel like being around Ellie because Kairn, had been playfully reciprocating Ellie’s advances, but Alan didn’t take the situation the right way and was overcome with jealously and awkwardness at being nearly ignored. “Why should I care? but then, he’s my freind too, isn’t he?â€

Interesting. I won't mention the stylistic stuff, as you alluded to it yourself. I daresay if you continue with this, editing will occur before final submission. But can we see the picture that led to this?

I like the story. I'd like to see you continue writing it. I'd also like to see this image that inspired this, also

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v239/ ... achCap.jpg

oops, sorry bout that, I linked to here from where i posted the caption, guess I should have cross linked the both of them eh? well here is the original caption, well technicaly the story got written before the caption but whatever.

I'm having a hard time editing the body of the text, it doesn't seem to want to cooperate, i guess I need to either link to a file or writ directly into the post for it to show up good then? maybe someone could help me out with that so my postings don't make people eyes bleed T_T

Sorry, my short and declining attention span can't focus on a block of text that size, but...

What you can do if you're having problems editing the post (tiny text entry window makes finding and adding parabreaks kinda hard) is to copy-paste it out and into a text editor program (Notepad, Simpletext, etc) or a Word Processor, and then place the paragraph break in where you want.

A suggestion, though. I find that using two linebreaks/carriagefeeds/whatevers between paras on the screen works much better than the standard one for printed matter. Granted, if we could use HTML on the forums, using the <P> and </P> tags would be ideal, but...

double-enter is what I recommend.

If you want to edit, the best thing you can do is to copy and paste the text into a word processor. Then you can save it and edit at your leisure, and even have someone else you know in real life take a look at it if you so desire. Also, thanks for sharing the picture. Somehow, that girl looks familiar.

ElanaSilvereye wrote:http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v239/esilvereye/BeachCap.jpg

oops, sorry bout that, I linked to here from where i posted the caption, guess I should have cross linked the both of them eh? well here is the original caption, well technicaly the story got written before the caption but whatever.

I'm having a hard time editing the body of the text, it doesn't seem to want to cooperate, i guess I need to either link to a file or writ directly into the post for it to show up good then? maybe someone could help me out with that so my postings don't make people eyes bleed T_T

[quote="Guendolen"]If you want to edit, the best thing you can do is to copy and paste the text into a word processor. Then you can save it and edit at your leisure, and even have someone else you know in real life take a look at it if you so desire. Also, thanks for sharing the picture. Somehow, that girl looks familiar.

[quote="ElanaSilvereye"]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v239/esilvereye/BeachCap.jpg

oops, sorry bout that, I linked to here from where i posted the caption, guess I should have cross linked the both of them eh? well here is the original caption, well technicaly the story got written before the caption but whatever.

I'm having a hard time editing the body of the text, it doesn't seem to want to cooperate, i guess I need to either link to a file or writ directly into the post for it to show up good then? maybe someone could help me out with that so my postings don't make people eyes bleed T_T[/quote][/quote]


That's probably because it's a screen from FMP.

yeah, its from Full Metal Panic, thats why its familiar.

Well, I've never seen that, but I have seen advertisements for it.

Does this make it easier to read?



Alan and his sister Ellie went to the beach together alot with their best friend Kairn. Kairn was really Ellie’s friend more than Alan’s, but Alan always really liked Kairn and couldn’t ever place why, having to settle for feeling somewhat left out or overshadowed by his sister who really like Kairn and wanted him for a boyfriend, despite Kairn being to old for her.


One day after all three were hanging out on the beach Alan stayed behind and wandered far down the beach after Kairn and his sister went home, Alan didn’t feel like being around Ellie because Kairn, had been playfully reciprocating Ellie’s advances, but Alan didn’t take the situation the right way and was overcome with jealously and awkwardness at being nearly ignored.


“Why should I care? But then, he’s my friend too, isn’t he?â€

Here's a couple more images for the story.

http://www.animegalleries.net/albums/media/121/fmp_kaname370.jpg

http://www.animegalleries.net/albums/media/121/fmp_kaname357.jpg