by Handmaiden Tanya » Thu Oct 05, 2006 7:58 pm
Overall, Neige, it's very well done. I'd like to especially point out that Etna's kick on the first page is near perfect.
I would like to offer a little bit of advice about the second page, however. Etna's right (HER right, not the viewer's) eye needs to stick out more. It's too faint and it honestly took me a second to notice that that's what it was. Also, when that close up, Laharl's fingers should have more definition, particularly between the finger and the nails.
The major problem I have, though, is Flonne. For the frantic movements she's making with her arm, the rest of her body (mainly the legs) is far too static, which ends up looking bad. Try something else with her legs to give them less of a statue-straight appearance.
Otherwise, it's pretty good. (Though it is a tad messy looking in one or two areas... YEAH OKAY I'LL SHUT UP NOW)
I'm not singling you out or something, I swear.