Hiro K's Caption Area

[Ninian]

Okay, sorry, I'm going to have to be a bit nitpicky here. A lot of your captions seem to read rather like an educational film. As such they tend to fit into one of three categories:

Third person exposition.

"(female name) was (male name) until (event) but now that (event) has happened, (male name) is now getting used to being (female name)"

These read kind of boring because they're so standard.


First person explanation. These aren't bad, but a first person perspective implies more feeling or emotion than you're giving them. Inside a person's head is a very intense place to be!

"I was (male name) until (exposition) and now I'm dealing with (situation)"

Try to put yourself into the person's situation and write it as if it's happening to you, the feelings it brings out and all. It should be colored by that person's biases, and it should feel lifelike.


A conversation between two people, one of whom responsible for the mess.

Person 1 -"You turned me into a girl!"
Person 2 -"Yes I did"
Person 1 -"Why?"
Person 2 -"Because (reason)"

To be fair, you do a good job of making sure these conversations make sense. You usually alternate colors, which helps. These are currently your strongest ones.


The content itself I'm not criticizing so much (you try a number of themes) but you might want to try some different openers than those three or structures for the story itself, or generally think outside the box for future pieces. You also might want to think about deepening the stories beyond just the TF happening, though I recognize that's a personal bias as I have detailed about how TFs by themselves don't mean much to me anymore.

[Kisai]

Well, isn't that par for the course for most captions anyway? ^^;;

[Hira Kanaki]

I have new captions, enjoy them.

Originally this was going to be published in August, but a screwy comp made sure that didn't happen.

You know there's probably a rule somewhere that states that this caption must be done at least once.

[Rowan]

Those were great ^____^

[Katty]

Hooray for catgirls captions! Double for catgirl chicken fight.

As for the other one, you should try a follow up to show him (Her) having a good day.

=^-^=

[Impy]

The catgirl one was pretty funny

[jimmyinwhite]

I want to give the bunny girl a big Hug.

[Lucky]

(Penny) was (Quarter) until he (was eaten by a frog) but now that (he got shat out) has happened, (Quarter) is now getting used to being (Penny).



If I may say I smell a new meme coming on.


Any way I do try and make my character's believable when I make a caption. Way they word things, talk, think, ect. How well I do this I have no clue.

XD

I like the water fight caption my self thow.

[Hira Kanaki]

Woohoo, new captions. ^^

My attempt at a FtM(mainly) caption.

Again, I think there's some rule that forces captionists to caption certain images in certain ways.

Enjoy them.

[Musashi]

Bishi catboy FTW! :D *Thumbs up!*

[Katty]

Catboys and shrine maidens. A nice combo if I do say so myself. =^-^=

[Rowan]

Haha, ok, those were good ^__^

[Hira Kanaki]

Start of a new month, new captions enjoy. ^^

Notably when I saw this pic it seemed captiony.

Two girls just sitting down and enjoying lunch.

With this one I tried to do an TG-ish "iPod" spoof ad.

[Lucky]

The Lunch one was adorable.

[Katty]

This first one was pretty funny. I hope they have fun Chaos.

The second one was pretty good, but why did she turn them into girls in the first place?

As for the third one, Nice one.

=^-^=