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Whatevr's Captions--criticism encouraged

PostPosted: Thu May 15, 2008 10:23 pm
by Whatevr89532
It's already posted in my signature and an announcement, but my captions are located here:
http://s828.photobucket.com/albums/zz206/whatevr89533/
I'm in want of criticism, after lurking for so long. Feel free to be as brutal as possible. In fact, I ask that of you...in order to improve things.

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Fri May 16, 2008 2:56 am
by Lord_zed
I've read all your caps and there all really good, as is your choice of image. The only thing i will crit at the moment is the text size and style, sometimes is too small to read without downloading and zooming beyond 100%, also some of the fancier fonts are harder to read then others.

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Fri May 16, 2008 6:31 pm
by Whatevr89532
Heheheh, thanks...I had over 50 images before making a single caption, I think...I did some extensive research and have a library...

Aah, other than that...I can see what you mean quite clearly with the unclear fonts. I always use notepad to write the text and then just copy it over to paint after having word proofread it for me...I try to pick a font that fits the character being portrayed, and it doesn't always work out to be as readable as I'd like...so, yeah. I suppose I could retype some of the bad-fonted ones if I ever quit being lazy long enough to. Lately, with newer ones, I am trying to pay more attention to if it's readable...

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Fri May 16, 2008 7:15 pm
by AshK
Your captions are pretty cool. The only criticism I have of them is the Caption marked: Neko House. The light Violet or Light Pink whatever it is, is hard to read unless you look really close to it. If I were you I would try and change the Font Color of Neko House if it is possible. Keep up the great work!

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Fri May 16, 2008 7:51 pm
by Lord_zed
just wanted to add something and without an account i can't edit,
All of your characters are very accepting of their change/s, while this works it can eventually go stale. maybe some other emotions would also work.
Other then that its great to see someone posting caption again

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 8:36 pm
by Whatevr89532
Hmm, yeah.
That probably results from me seeing a lot of "punishment" or "unwanted change" type captions. I end up not liking most of them no matter how well they're put because even most diverted endings that make it happier are rather disappointing to me...In short, I'd have to make the writing and ending very, very good to even want to keep my own if I made one like that.
Also, Neko House's text was retyped to make it more readable, more new captions are trickling into my album lately...be sure to check, eh?

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Sun May 18, 2008 11:26 pm
by Lucky
I like your captions. I hope you consider doing more in the future.

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Mon May 19, 2008 9:23 pm
by Whatevr89532
Thanks Lucky, I liked yours too. I'm making more rather often now that it's vacation time; in fact, expect about five or six more to appear by sometime tomorrow--I have the words typed, just need to add them to the images.

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Mon May 19, 2008 9:58 pm
by AshK
Neko House is much easier to read! Thank you so much! Also the one marked "On Saturday" was also good! Keep up the great work!

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Mon May 26, 2008 9:08 pm
by Lucky
Whatevr89532 wrote:Thanks Lucky, I liked yours too. I'm making more rather often now that it's vacation time; in fact, expect about five or six more to appear by sometime tomorrow--I have the words typed, just need to add them to the images.



Thanks. Also on your new ones. They seem to be abit to copy and paste. Like In the guy's reactions. Try changing things up maby?

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Tue May 27, 2008 6:13 pm
by Whatevr89532
Uhh...trying to look into that, but I'm not sure exactly which ones you mean because I can't really remember which ones were made when--my brain is consistently frazzled. Erm, could I maybe have the titles of a few?
It may just be because I made them in mostly the same day...

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Tue May 27, 2008 7:13 pm
by AshK
Nice work with Field!

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Wed May 28, 2008 4:45 pm
by Jaya
Those are all very cool, Whatevr. Excellent pictures and fun little stories to read ^^

I do have one criticism; someone already kind of said it- you may want to consider alternating how you describe the transformation in the captions. Most of them, with slight variation, have pretty much the same description- with the exception of the actual transformation the captions are each very unique and creative, but they'll really start to stand out from each other if you make the transformation itself unique to each story (to an extent ^^)

Good luck with your future captions, you've done a great job so far!

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Wed May 28, 2008 7:07 pm
by AshK
I hope to see some more soon! Keep up the great work!

Re: Criticism wanted

PostPosted: Wed May 28, 2008 10:11 pm
by Whatevr89532
Hnn...I'm not entirely sure how to avoid similar-sounding transformations--after all, the start and end state have several things in common by genre definition. Generally I just type up words as they come to mind, it never occurs to me to look back and see if there's repetition...
Though, recently I am experimenting with slower changes, which might be helpful. I assume there must be something good about those if people are posting about them...or I could just be misreading things.
Plans for future captions include introducing another recurring character...the stuttering girl. She'll be explained a bit in my next story, hopefully.