great captions

[Mr. X]

Here are some links to two good captions I made
http://i229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... 165_29.jpg

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... orofsp.jpg

[Haylie]

Sweeeeet. I liked "arachnophobia". The angel one wasn't bad, either. Just check the grammar and spelling and you'll have it made. Good job.

[Katty]

Hmmm. That spider one was kinda weird. Maybe if it said that he had a girly scream or something. I dunno. Good start none the less though. I'll keep reading. =^-^=

[Lucky]

Try reading you captions out loud/in your head. The wording is kinda funny.

[Rowan]

Hahaha, ok, I liked the Spider One. Reminds me of me, I *HATE* Spiders!

The angel one was awesome ^____^

[Ninian]

Let your audience decide if they're good or bad. I know you didn't sign the criticism waiver, but this is an intervention.

The first one isn't bad, but is in dire need of editing. The grammar is off, the potentially emotional dialogue is wooden. It's definitely not a bad idea for a story -- in fact, if you had thought out the story a bit more (including an explanation for the sex change) it might have been great.

The second one however is what's making me bring down the hammer. It's beyond hope. It could have been funny or amusing, but instead it makes no sense, the grammar is a trainwreck, and it's blantantly sexist. It's not outright offensive (that would be misogynist or misandrist) but sexist nonetheless. Don't go there lightly, this is one of the few TG communities where a few of the "girls" are actually girls.


Also, edit your links if you want people to read this post comfortably, horizontal scrolling is fail.

[UDDCommander]

Let your audience decide if they're good or bad. I know you didn't sign the criticism waiver, but this is an intervention.

The first one isn't bad, but is in dire need of editing. The grammar is off, the potentially emotional dialogue is wooden. It's definitely not a bad idea for a story -- in fact, if you had thought out the story a bit more (including an explanation for the sex change) it might have been great.

The second one however is what's making me bring down the hammer. It's beyond hope. It could have been funny or amusing, but instead it makes no sense, the grammar is a trainwreck, and it's blantantly sexist. It's not outright offensive (that would be misogynist or misandrist) but sexist nonetheless. Don't go there lightly, this is one of the few TG communities where a few of the "girls" are actually girls.


Also, edit your links if you want people to read this post comfortably, horizontal scrolling is fail.

Agreed, completely and totally.

[Mr. X]

Here are links to some more great captions of mine

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... ogethe.jpg

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... untain.jpg

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... gstars.jpg

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... 1angry.jpg

[UDDCommander]

Your captions are just not well written, grammar errors and poorly done clichés matched with unrealistic character development and mismatched pronouns. Not to mention the first one was a broken link.

[jimmyinwhite]

Here are links to some more great captions of mine

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... ogethe.jpg
what was this one going to be?

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... untain.jpg
love will find away.

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... gstars.jpg
watch what you ask for it may cost more than you're willing to pay.

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... 1angry.jpg
never take what's not yours unless you are willing to deal with the payback.

[Sasha]

nice but #1 is broken

[Kara-chan]

Um, no offense, but your captions sorta...well, spelling and grammar are still taught in the public schools these days, right?

[Katty]

Sorry to be so mean, but it is not the best batch of captions I have read. You just need more practice. I suggest that you put your caption text into word or something to see if it has any mistakes it can pick up. That normally helps me with some of my mistakes.
=^-^=

[Haylie]

Okay, even I have to admit this is getting a bit tedius, and I have low standards. The grammar is getting worse, I'm sorry, it just is. They're good concepts, just not good stories.
I'm not really one to talk, but still.

[Mr. X]

Here some links to some good captions of mine but DON'T look at them if you're just going to criticize me on my spelling and grammar instead of the story.

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... romise.jpg

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... gazine.jpg

http://s229.photobucket.com/albums/ee17 ... ndacar.jpg